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Fall

Do you notice the fluctuations
Of haphazard physiological responses
Which leave me on edge
Too frightened to run
And perhaps excessively foolish?

A stalemate which isn’t
Meant to be mistaken for stubbornness
Or something as admirable as determination

But is nothing more than rigidness
That serves as a makeshift brace
Until I buckle completely under the weight

Author notes

may edit as time permits. I would like to expand.

A contest entry

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  • ionabus
    July 20
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    I think so many people could relate to this poem in so many ways. Love the last verse.


  • Yemassee gold member
    July 19

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    Sounds more like fear to me. Or at least some measure of it. When those act in a way that we fear to react. Maybe because when ever we do, we get the backlash or maybe it's even darker and more sinister than that.

    I also see that whatever it is...it's simply too much, so I think of depression of a sorts, unable to cope with the anxiety.

    • FallingSideways silver member
      July 20
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      I think you encompassed it all. It was written with the feelings I was going through: being afraid of someone's temper-
      Afraid to comment on various things or voice an opinion when I felt wronged due to their possible negative reaction or as you had worded it, their backlash. It is amazing how when you love someone all the things the two inviduals sometimes go through until one or both people end up metaphorically buckling.


  • fangs to blame
    June 19
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    Beautiful word usage. I enjoyed this.


  • Janice M Pickett
    March 12

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    I found this really deep and meaningful. It's the kind of poem that makes me stop and say YES this poet is a deep thinker and I enjoyed that. Excellent write.


  • poet2angels gold member
    January 16

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    Excellent expression of the prompt "fall"
    I love the language and the imagery,,, so beautifully penned...Since you said in notes that you may be editing, I will check back before contest closes...
    TY for entering!

    Lynda

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