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Discordant



I have strewn myself upon the rubble of somewhere else
that used to be inside me, and find no cornice, no edge, to grasp.

I cast distance with a hook of my wit through rues and lace
of your existence as though you were lattice, and I a breeze.

Yet within the crease of tiniest leaves my garden’s endless,
textured, curved, curled and twining in light. 

My empty, shifting mirror’s only a reflectionless pond.
I remain only my own duet, solo still, a math of lesser blood.

Do you hear me inside you or just feel me trembling
in my own rubble hunting old keys to share our new song?

I fear my soul has sighed itself away.













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I wish to thank Adsaige for her help in editing this poem.

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  • Swan song gold member
    January 16

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    My empty, shifting mirror’s only a reflectionless pond.
    I remain only my own duet, solo still, a math of lesser blood.

    I thought these lines were tremendous!!!!!


  • Spiritvision angel
    January 14

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    Since when does Moqui talented purple bear need help? Cant believe that, nope this is a beautiful write and your soul is far to great to be sighed away, eever.


  • adsaige
    January 14

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    There is nothing I can truly say about
    this poem...It is one that leaves me
    speechless, and smiling a small almost
    secretive smile, as if a great secret
    from a lover has been unveiled unto me.

    The couplets are absolutely stunning,
    their sense of direction sure, and
    they were in the beginning, but now...
    it is complete, and the destination...
    well, that's not to be known completely...
    just followed.

    I have a feeling you spent hours on this.


    • Danny Beatty gold member
      January 14
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      thank you so much ... i spent about three hours on it ... but i was unhappy with it even after you helped make what I had much better, because it was missing something and then I just threw the last line one ... just came to me like in a flash and i was happy with it then.

      your comment makes my day


  • upperworld06
    January 13

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    nice, i really love this line- My empty, shifting mirror’s only a reflectionless pond.
    I remain only my own duet, solo still, a math of lesser blood.

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