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Burn Book

We have a list
All of do
Of people we wish would die
People we that we hate
But that others might love
Consumed by the flames of rage
The wars and fires
And deaths and murders!
The useless violence that follows
Humanity
Animals don't fight like this
But isn't that what we are?
Humans
We're the worst kind fo animal
The kind that doesn't care
If were killing someone's son
Or mother
Or if the man at the end of your gun
Has children waiting for him at home
We don't care if somone's hurting
We just want to see them bleed
All our lives we loath
And critacize
Anyoen around us
So what if their different!
So what if their black
Red
Or white
Or any color!
Who cares!?
What does it matter?
We're all just humans inside
Cut me open and you'll see
The you have to same blood
We both bleed in
Red
Hatred breeds more hatred
And fire's start more blazes
A list for us
Is never just a lsit
It's a book of names
That our hate will burn
The paper's gone
But we still hate
Hate
HATE!
And in the end
All that's left
Is ash

A contest entry

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  • Southern Darling
    February 4

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    Amazing ending to a slightly rambly poem. You could probably revise this a little and make it even more breathtaking. Just a little streamlining.

    PS. We're not ALL that bad!!!