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Three steps across the grass.

Three steps across the grass.
Eight steps up the stairs.
Four steps to the door.
One knock,
brakes my heart once more.

Five steps on my knees.
As the concrete swings closer.
Six fighting beats,
from my struggling heart.
Nine deep breathes as I rip apart.

Seven arms length,
as I crawl across the floor.
Two hands down,
dig my nails into the ground.
Pulling myself closer as
I try not to stumble.

Ten fearless tears,
stain rossey cheeks.
Twelve drops of blood,
are liquid in me.
As eleven sways closer,
hanging on lies.

And dark strings fall upward,
playing puppet with our lives.

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  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    March 19

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    a little jagged, but overall it was very thought provoking and interesting. idk, it is good!

    kAsSiE


    • Frikyeah
      March 20
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      thanks! glad you commented, thank you for your honesty. I'll try to do better.

      -Emm


  • JorgeST
    March 10
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    AMAZING

    I love the energy the emotion you show lots of imagery great job keep it up

    • Frikyeah
      March 10
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      thanks!! I'm glad you liked it!!
      btw I love your pic!!