you deserve to know
at least one damn truth
yet my words are replaced
by heartbeats
that are getting louder
they hurt my throat so much
I can no longer speak
I can only stare at you
express myself in silence
knowing that you're fast asleep
if I could just say something though...
but how could I tell you something
I don't even understand myself
Author notes
“And sometimes hurt is not of the body.
More often it is words, or lack thereof. A lack of words.
The cruelty of silence.”
— Unknown.
A contest entry
- a lack of words by freestallion.
600 points, ended January 29, 2009, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think...
Comments
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this is so sad and totally understandable!
i love this write so much!!
thank you so much for sharing
Blessings
Rend
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wow
i liked this one alot...and the quote it was based off of. -
i love the first stanza. the way you described the feeling is amazing. me too, i don't understand sometimes. well done and beautiful write overall.
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you took the prompt and made it your own. this is a very very good piece of poetry. love, lane
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ala ku namang balung sabyan
Leah
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This is what I call, perfectly articulate
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perfect
what i mean by perfect is that its perfect confusion. its great i just wish i could make as much sense of it as you.
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Wow...this says so much...such pain in this poem....you expressed yourself amazingly!
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That is when we are left with our mouth full of silence.
Ah, your words always have a way to stir feelings and thoughts and even memories.
Lovely Anna
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Anna Lee this is lovely, especially the second stanza. If you have not read any Pablo Neruda, rush out and buy a book of his along with Hernandez, Cavafy and Eluard. I think you will appreciate their depth.
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Thanks Heath, I haven't read them yet, now that you've mentioned. i am going to start with Neruda
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wow
This is so touching my friend..so very soft and tenderly done..I LOVE THIS!
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Rich thank you
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whoever really knows what to say?
It's all chance that we say the right thing at the right time and even then it's usually an accident. Anywho...love the write.
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ah Jason,
Thank you, yes...chance
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The last line is perfect- love it!
I think this will get you far in the contest- good luck!
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nice poetry !
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Steve, Thank you. it makes me happy when I see you on my page
Anna Lee
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I think we've all felt like this one time or another in life, we feel like we have so much to say yet can't find the words to.
lovely poem here Anna
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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Ken, thank you...where have you been?
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Hey Anna,
I've been away for the past week and just got back today
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I wrote one great truth recently (that no one but me probably read, "love should be simple, everything else might be hard, but not love. And yet it is. There should be a mutual spark in a couple's eyes that just tells everything. I saw it once, I know what it looks like. I'll now know it again when I see it.
It is sad people don't communicate, it was a great flaw of mine I know. The next time will be easy, it'll just happen, I'll see it in her eyes.
But yes, when we aren't sure of the feelings, questions dominate our thoughts...often questions that are just smoke-like, hard to grasp...I have been there too, but not in a long while.
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Thank you Sir Yem, I hope it'll happen for you
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'but how could I tell you something
I don't even understand myself'
i love that line.
you've written with a quiet voice that i love. i found this poem so... intimate.
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I understand this feeling, of wanting so desperately to say something, anything close to the truth of the matter, and all that comes out is your breathing and your heart is pounding in your head, I understand all too well.
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Tiff, thank you so much, glad to see you here
mwah
love,
Anna Lee
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It's hard, isn't it sometimes, to open up and say what's in our hearts, whether good or bad. Sometimes, though, we put off saying what needs to be said, no matter the hurt it may cause.
This a very profound poem, well written and emotion filled.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Thank you Ms Dee
Anna Lee
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"yet my words are replaced
by heartbeats"
that is so beautiful, Anna, i have often felt the same way, you have put this feeling very eloquently back into words..
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Thank you
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Wonderfully Expressed!
Such a way about you as you weave so beautifully! It's so nice to be able to write when you have something in your heart that flutters about and wants to be shared here, there, and everywhere. Great take on the contest you've penned for, and no doubt your words say so much more! 
Much love Fly Shy, and I'll red ya as you write! 
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
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Thank you Tim
love,
Fly Shy
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