Tell me why, why do I try (why do I try)
try to impress you, I'm trying to impress you
Show you just who I am (show that I'm true)
I hope you admire me, cause I admire you
and I fall in silence as my heart beats out
tonight I'll lay awake, with the thoughts in mind
for years I searched, and here is where I find
find out what was missing by my side
it's you who seems to make everything right
I'm not here to take your heart and run away
I'm here to let our hearts dance here tonight
and if I'm not to bold, may I ask for your heart to stay
cause I swear my heart has never beat this way
It's never beat so fast (I hope this love lasts)
tonight I'll lay awake, with the thoughts in mind
for years I searched, and here is where I find
find out what was missing by my side
it's you who seems to make everything right
So baby, don't you ever be afraid (cause I promise to stay)
I'll always let my heart do that talking for me
where the truth it will say (I promise to stay me)
I found out what's missing by my side
so please, won't you stay tonight?
won't you stay tonight?
Author notes
This girl's giving me hope of love. What will happen, I have no idea. She lives an hour away and I'm in school so it will be hard to see her a lot. However, She seems to like me and I'm not sure yet but I'm starting to like her...
Let's hope it works out.
<3
Please tell me what you think
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i liked reading this. Of course i think any girl who reads this is going to wish she's the one you're writing about. I did not like the repetition and some of the wording was off.
To me its one of those poems where you have sentences that do nothing for your poem, called "filler" .
like the last two lines. they don't add anything. i think it would have sounded better if the second to last line was simply "so please" and then the last line "will you stay with me tonight?"
just what i think.
we know you found out what's missing by your side, now creatively describe feelings using different words. Or, you could have said the same thing using different words and arranging the the words differently.
there is so much you can do with this poem. Now, saying that, i can tell you how much i liked it. *applauds and cheers*
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