I've noticed that rainpuddles reflect
reality a tad bit to the left if you
look hard enough.
I used to wonder that if I jumped into
these puddles and dispersed the raindrops
could I destroy the reflection or would they
simply scatter before stitching back together
slightly to the right.
You showed me that if you press hard enough on
gas pedals and puddles they break. My sewing kit
can make you fuction again but I'm afraid I've left
mistakes and scars along your seems.
I've noticed that sometimes storm clouds smile
and blue skies cry.
I think I've grown so accustomed to your bright
crisp smile and dry aeroplane eyes that I ignored
the times when your smile is wrinkled and your eyes
soggy. I suppose you could call this denial,
though I've learned that excuses tend
to bury themselves.
I once kissed a star and burnt my lips. You could
call this justice or abuse though I call it stupidity.
Stars are beautiful from earth but I learned in Science
that they are just fire if you look a bit harder.
My eyes never dialate correctly. I hardly passed my
vision test because I tend to look at things far away
because they look better blurred kind of like christmas
light. Its almost magical when you squint.
I guess that could be considered a curse or a blessing.
I never saw you coming,
and I never saw you leave.
Author notes
catseye
A contest entry
- feeling just a little unloved. by written-in-ink.
700 points, ended January 24, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
criticm welcome.
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so many different points to look at in a single piece, and it doesnt wander away from the basic theme. I like the personal reflectiveness you have expressed here. very nice work
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very well written, great imagery, all together a really good poem
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I love the metaphors and also the imagery in this piece... well done!!! I really liked this
~*Cristy*~ -
i love this
i really do you have no idea.
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Really good Kristine. It jumps out at me. It is really beautiful and the metaphors are great. The picutures that it makes in my mind are breath taking.
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beautiful :]
this is great...
like always.
lol
very original and different... which is good!
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I've noticed that sometimes storm clouds smile
and blue skies cry
beautiful lines cat. Original as always
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Nothing to criticize, loved everything about.. Am nearsighted as hell, no the feeling.. Thanks for a splendid read..
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wow, thats really amazing, very well written.
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