Forget it.
You never expected it
Did you?
Just because I'm honest,
Truthful,
Reliable
Doesn't mean you'll
Hold up your end of the deal.
Stupid you.
How could I honestly believe
You'd uphold any morals
At all?
Stupid me.
My goody-two shoes way
Are gone.
You broke our pact
So I'll return the deed.
Don't expect me to remain same.
Because you didn't
Stupid you.
Stupid me.
Author notes
Prompt: "I promise..."
This is weird and not my usual style...oh well. Not sure what I think about it.
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i liked it. i feel a lot twards this poem becaus i am goin through this with some one who dosnt want me in their life, but keeps showing up in mine. i feel like, if they dont play by the rules, then why should I? its pretty dead on to how i feel, and feels like what i want to say a lot of the time. thanks, its really good and pretty helpful.
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This is almost a conversation, although one-sided, or perhaps, talking inside the head -- but it is vivid and realistic. A very good response to the prompt and very well-done!
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the frank language shows a lot of emotion. i can kind of see the stage the narrararator is in, after the sorrow of being let down and now just tired of it all
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nice anger
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"nice anger" Yay anger!
Thanks for the comment
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...what is your usual style? Just wondering. Another awesome poem! I love the repetition [sp?] (the stupid me/you part).
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Good question... I think it's something a bit for descriptive...maybe...
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I liked it!
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