I Cant Be Disonest. I Love Baked Beans
And Admire There Sause Drenched Profiles
In My Plastic Blue Bowl, The Way They
Make Me Flustared And Hotter Then The Dryest
Of Desserts. They Will Be My End And My Death
They Are So Beautiful, Like Little Tired Children
Crying To Be Eaten But I am Hungry Ill eat Them
If There My Soulmates Anyway. They Taste Like
Bacon and Carpteting When They Slip Down My Throte
Into Oblivion.
Author notes
its the word bank option
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Uhm. Okay. Well. There are quite a few major spelling issues here and my concern is that you have been repeatedly advised of the errors but continue to enter the poem in contests WITHOUT correcting them. So, because you've entered it into my Comments contest - I will take the time you obviously did not and lay out the errors for you.
Disonest should be dishonest.
There (in the second and eighth lines) should be their.
Sause should be sauce.
Flustared should be flustered.
Then (in the forth line) should be than.
Dryest should be driest.
Desserts should be deserts.
Soulmates should be soul mates.
I'm not sure what word Carpteting should be - perhaps carpeting? But that makes little to no sense...
Throte should be throat.
In addition, when using contractions such as can't or I'll, an apostrophe should be used. Lastly, I found it distracting that you capitalized each and every word and used very little punctuation. Not to mention that the background makes the poem nearly impossible to read. But at least I can turn the background off!
All in all, not really what I'm looking for in this contest but thanks for your entry. Best of luck...
- Bean Sidhe
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Baked beans.
Who would thunk it?
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jay bush and his golden retriever (from the busch's baked beans commercial) would really dig this.
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hahaha uhhh...not really what i'm lookin for
They Slip Down My Throte
throte should be throat.
nice write tho lol, i want some now -
HHAHAHAHA LOL nice! some spelling mistakes but yeah good work
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you have quite a few spelling errors and grammatical mistakes. But a nice piece. thanks for entering
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Wow. Hahaha. Way to go for original
Got some good desrciptions up there, not to mention this is hilarious. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing
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