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The Moon

Laying upon the bed
Looking up through
The sky light,
As your dreaming
In a far away land.
Wrapped up
In my arms.
The moon shines upon us
Gently lighting
Every surface of the room.                                           

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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 11

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    Lovely imagery throughout this poem of yours.
    I love the emotion and thought that you put
    into it. Thanks so much for taking the time to
    enter our contest. We appreciate it and wish
    all the best with it! Take care!




    Jeremy0826


  • Dragonbabyx3
    February 26

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    That is a beautiful and romantic write! Although... I dont think a Uncle should write that to his niece A wonderful and beautiful write hun! Thankyou!