Wonderland's torn fabric drew jagged lines
seperated by hell's heels, marbles shattered
lips blued, numbed from an acidic apple,
without understanding I loved..
but, what I loved was filled with hate
each held me tight
Author notes
Prompt: Picture Prompt (35 words)
Artist unknown
A contest entry
- 10/35/30 QUICKIE by Ziola.
700 points, ended January 12, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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it's sad that kids have to go through this and witnessing the ugliness - leading to domestic violence, divorces, or whatever. i like your take on the prompt. good luck in the contest! =)
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powerful in such a short write.
but, what I loved was filled with hate
each held me tight
beautiful!
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wow, this is really intense, wonderfully done and good luck in the contest, take care
Stephanie ♥ -
Wow. How can I compete with this? This is amazing. Such haunting beauty in so few words. Great job, and good luck, though I doubt you need it!
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ouch, that hurt. so deep, very intense. i felt that with a chill, bravo
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Great take on the prompt - the...well, everything was amazing to a point of perfection. I don't see how you could have used those 35 words more beautifully.
Good luck in the contest!
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intense write, awesome take on the prompt
Best of luck to you
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