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Hidden Truths

Missing image
Silence surrounds,
Envelopes,
Consumes.

Unable to be free,
Forbidden to confess.

Gagged by my hope...
My freedom.

Set apart from life.
Wrapped up in misery's tale.

Subconscience contrains,
Held back from within.


The truth hidden.

Author notes

Picture prompt: http://indigochildren.deviantart.com/art/Silencio-by-FreakyBabe-71820880

35 words

This makes sense to me...don't know about the rest of you though

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 4

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    This is an awesome write. I love the imagery and the metaphors. I could feel the pain too. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest

  • Jailyn
    February 5

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    wow, this is such a seemingly simple poem, but holds so much depth and darkness in such poetic words.

    your imagery is amazing, and to be honest, at times kind of scary.

    Gagged by my hope...
    My freedom.

    this line in particular really got to me, the imagery and feeling of your words actually making me grab my throat cos I felt momentarily like i was actually gagging or choking... it takes a very precise talent to be able to envoke that type of feeling into your readers!

    Thank you for your entry into my contest and thank you for sharing!


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    February 2

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    very deep write. i love the picture that you put with the poem to. it goes well with it. great job on all the tropies that you have won with this poem.

    kaycee


  • Stormy Days
    February 1

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    deep sad write the picture go's well dark very dark amazing work well written made me shiver scary so much with so few words


  • nobumagawaX
    January 28
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    wow very deep..love the poeticness


  • Shades of Pale silver member
    January 19
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    wow, dark, but very good!!!! GREAT WORK!!!


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    January 12

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    well the title and poem do make sense to me, too. truth is scary sometimes and poor lady for having to go through this. well done. good luck in the contest! =)


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    January 12

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    Ooo I like your take on this better than mine
    Great job, I loved "Unable to be free,
    Forbidden to confess." that was a cool line


    Good luck!
    Claire x


  • Carpe Noctem
    January 12

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    Very nice take on the picture! I am so in awe of how amazing these writes can be in so few words. You really did the prompt justice. Good luck!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    January 12

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    wow, this is so great, and such a flow, it pick sup so quickly, it works so well with your words though, great job and good luck
    Stephanie ♥


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    January 12

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    I really liked this! I really loved your take on the prompt, it was so well written. Hope you do well in the contest!

    Take care


  • In Too Deep1
    January 12

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    A wonderfully dark ands well penned take on the prompt. Great emotion and language. A most enjoyable read,a dn best wishes in the comp


  • Ziola
    January 12
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    Ohh, i really like this, this is so how im feeling always


  • Canadamomma
    January 12

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    amazing job on the prompt...loved the format of the write as well
    best of luck

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