Frozen angles
of perfect imperfections
shattered into a deathly silence;
Tried escaping
but ended up tied for freak show.
Now the ricochet
of the cold snow flakes
fall, effortlessly,
needlessly.
-- my body calls after them
Author notes
http://lightsided-angel.deviantart.com/art/Face-in-the-dark-2-109284550
35 words
Quickie -- x
A contest entry
- 10/35/30 QUICKIE by Ziola.
700 points, ended January 12, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hoodwinked!
This is simply beautiful. Your words flow effortlessly into painful images that show how the world can fall away and we can so desperately call after it to hear silence.
I'm sorry I am late with the hoodwink, but hope you are glad for more comments!
Shari
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wow as always darling
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Thank you sweets
How ish you?
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what a great take on the prompt! it's a goosebumpishy feel and your choice of words are brilliant. good luck in the contest! =)
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such a chill with this one, great job, love what you did with the prompt
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"Perfect imperfections" Sigh, oxymorons make my day.
I particurally love the last stanza and last line.
Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you
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this does not sux! i love the ending, most certainly, amazing
i really thoug about this pick but figured against it
i like what you saw, good luck, muah
Stephanie ♥
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(shh... don't tell anyone but I had no idea wtf I was writing >.<
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sounds like me
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omg, i love your new pic you are like ubber pretty much
oh and good luck
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It's called half an hour on photoshop and lots of modifying
Good luck to you too
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oh please you are pretty anyways, the photoshop just made the pic pop, and scream black and white films!
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Everyone looks good in black and white
It looks better now than it did, a lot more contrast ^^
I have more up on deviant
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i'll have to look
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Yus everyone!!
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lol. no
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ah yeah lol
Find me someone who don't then
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haha...i dont feel like looking, but ive seen people before who look dreadful in it
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Awww really?
Most people look better in it coz it focuses more on them
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