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The Killer

The body is there, the soul is gone
The crime is committed, the deed is done
As rain pours down, hitting the street
He embraces the murder, it's another treat
He butchers the body to enjoy the kill
Tastes the blood to taste the thrill
And the blood from the corpse mixed with the rain
Flows like a river to the streetside drain
He walks home and awaits the day
The rain has washed the blood away

-Andi

Author notes

Iactually wrote this when I was mad at one of my teacher s and I very nearly got suspendedfor it....they took it as a theat....I can't IMAGINE why.....what did I do? I'm just an innocent poet!

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  • vamp-angel
    January 22
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    all i have to say is that its an awesome poem.


  • Lost Night Shadow gold member
    January 19

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    That is amazing...I loved the flow. Strangely enough I can relate.....I used to have dreams that I was an animal murdering and slaughtering people....and scarily, loving the feel of it.


  • snakeprincess742
    January 19
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    i mean is well done is!!


    • Andiness
      January 19
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      I know what you mean!! *Hugs and friendly punch on the arm*


  • snakeprincess742
    January 19

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    lmao sure your innocent poet but this poem isnt well done you get a hug -huggles- a smile and a thanks for the time and effort put in to make such a good poem


  • tawk gold member
    January 19

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    Wow what chilling imagery, gave me goosebumps while reading, you are very talented. I can't imagine why you nearly got suspended wow what a write. Thanks for sharing. hugs Theresa


    • Andiness
      January 19
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      Because I have a bunch of wusses for teachers....and I left it on his desk! *wicked grin*


  • just sam
    January 14

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    Lol... I can't imagine why they'd find this poem in the least threatening. It's good though.
    Tastes the blood to taste the thrill
    Awesome line, slightly creepy, but so well penned. It all is, flawless flow and rhyme, well done.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 14
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    I like the rhyme, spot on Very neat read, well done!

  • BeautifullyForsaken
    January 12

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    I like this a lot! A good write the whole way through. With that said, I am VERY glad that you have a way to vent your anger. Otherwise, you could be the next Jack the Ripper with these lines! Or wait, Jane the Ripper


  • starving4perfection
    January 12

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    this is a great write! i really like every single bit of it! haha i wonder why you got suspended??

    anyway great job!

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