A view inside her mind,
all is lost;
she is bound by her own fear,
wrapped in chaos so cold.
No-one notices the change;
a new life lives on,
unexpected.
"Enjoy the silence,
my love."
Author notes
http://indigochildren.deviantart.com/art/Silencio-by-FreakyBabe-71820880
A woman suffering from insanity, as a new "person" takes over her mind. This is how she feels inside herself now. The last spoken part is of course spoken by the "new girl."
A contest entry
- 10/35/30 QUICKIE by Ziola.
700 points, ended January 12, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Reminds me of my poem "Girl, Interrupted in her Music".
The spoken voice at the end was pretty chilling.
Congrats on bronze.
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Very beautiful and chilling write. Congrats on the bronze!!
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Enjoy the silence without the misery of oneself, very nice take on prompt, great job
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ohh creepy thoughts for sure. i like how you incorporate the darkness in this poem. well done. good luck in the contest! =)
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A wonderfully penned take on the prompt. There are so many haunting phantoms emerging in this piece. Beautiful imagery and flow, A most enjoyable read, and best wishes in the comp
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Thank you very much!
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oh dude, i totally love the ending, its brillant, and lovely, goood luck and take care
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*shudder* Such dark thoughts...
The entire piece is...chilling.
Great job and good luck in the contest!
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