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Invisible

Slowly,
slowly,
my voice grew small...

Faint

Faded

I gave up.


No.

I broke.
Shattered.


Slowly,
slowly,
I faded away,
invisible.


Unfeeling


...Uncaring.

Author notes

...Erg... my my mind won't give my anything to work with... ! Not working... ... oh well...


Oh yeah! The picture credit is http://www.loreleiweb.com/28/fant/00.jpg

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  • HereComesTheSun
    February 13

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    i like the format very thoughtful as in someone thinking. it also gave emotion and personality to the write. good luck in that contest


  • Faded Existence
    January 14

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    I think you did very well capturing this picture! Nicely done. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck

    -Faded


  • liduen silver member
    January 12

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    *more shock* You entered the contest...again!

    Nice alliteration This is really good, deal with it!

    And now for my *new* favorite smilie


    • checkmate-
      January 12
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      Hadn't you entered twice? I thought so

      You stole my favorite smilie!

      Good luck in the contest! Your poems are awesome

      -Paradox


  • Blaa
    January 12

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    nice

    i liked this
    i get where the poem is coming from-exactly how i've felt
    awesome work!


  • StarIlluminated
    January 12

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    It's really goooooood! I know you don't think so, but it is. I like it

    *KT*

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