You.
You've beguiled me,
Lacerated me,
Binded me and asphyxiated me.
And still you're not satisfied.
The bloodlust is only for me.
I gave you another chance.
You took it,
Convoluted it,
Contorted it and crucified it.
And still you're not satisfied.
Your bloodlust is only for me.
The anguish I'm in-
Makes me scream out,
Shout out,
Curse out and yell out.
And still I'm not satisfied.
Our bloodlust is for each other.
I was better off when you were dead to me.
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Written on January 12th, 2009.
-Sadien-
Author notes
Let me just say that someone is hurting me, once again. So if this isn't the best write, it's not supposed to be. In my eyes, the best is raw.
For the contest this is entered in, I chose this option:
13. Write me about lying and deception and the problems you have faced because of it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Over 100 Options and everyone needs to enter! by joleahe.
550 points, ended November 20, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a very unique poem. very powerful. good job and thank you for entering.
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great usage of words, very strong!
i like the way you have repeatedly used the line
your blood lust is only for me
it works very well, can i just say and maybe its only my opinion but the last two lines dont appear strong enough to me, i feel the poem ends a little flat, i hope i havent offended as this is only my take on it,
again good luck with the contest!!
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I'm not offended- Each person sees a poem differently than the next of course. I personally don't think the last lines are supposed to be strong or hateful... I just think they're supposed to portray how I liked it better when I just ignored her and she wasn't really in my life.
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This has a strong lyrical quality to it, Saderz. Each stanza seems to repeat within itself? And at the same time, explode with more evidence against the accused. I love it.
On a side note, however, I am sorry that you're going through so much pain right now, darling. ♥ If there's anyway I can help you with that, don't hesitate to ask.
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Thanks.
I think I'll be okay for the most part. I'm deciding to not let the pain get to me this time except through my poetry. Yeah, it's had me down a bit, but not as badly as it could be.
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Beautifully written as usual
A great write an a beautiful read
Well done, my bonnie Americani friend
Can I make poet babies with you now?
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This poem is about some serious shit I am going through and you make jokes? *shakes head* Sad.
Anyways though, thanks for the compliment. -
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My bad >.<
Sorry
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