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Devouring Purity (unfinished)

I would eat your heart
I would eat your soul
I would eat every part
I could behold

My hungry eyes devour
Every second of your life
Every movement that you make
I can taste

The cream of your skin
I can feel on my tongue
The cherry of your lips
I can taste your blood

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • hawkeslake gold member
    January 13

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    For some reason this doesn't look or feel unfinished, just that it could be part of a longer series. Again, very good descriptions and the tone is nicely dark -- background fits nicely, too. Good work, Krys!


  • Selithia
    January 12
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    This is freakin awesome so far...cant wait til you finish it!