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i imagine where you will be

i will be able to escape
but where will you be?
you will be in bed
not dying
surviving
you will be on the road
not driving
fighting
i will be able to sleep
but where will you be?
you will be at work
not learning
earning
you will be playing cards
not getting
betting
i will be able to visit
but where will you be?
you will be at the bar
not drinking
seeking
you will be next to me
not only hiding
lying

Author notes

i don't think this is true, but we all think it some days.

where will you be?

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Comments


  • The Cube
    January 14

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    Makes me think of a unsure relationship with a guy that you aren't sure is true to his words, and perhaps is using you as bait to find another girl.


  • Laughing Buddh
    January 13

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    hehe......nice......though if i were u,
    i wd hv replaced
    "not dying
    surviving "

    with

    "not resting/not sleeping
    surviving"

    but it's ur poem..........keep writing


  • writebrain
    January 12

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    nice.

    you're right. we all think like this sometimes.

    "you will be at work
    not learning
    earning"

    very clever...
    the end feels out of place, maybe?...perhaps it feels different than the others....

    i like it a lot.