Syrup-sweet and
edible,
you pose, proposing
in languid prose
feats deserving poetry.
Supple-soft and
craveable,
milk and honey, love,
ungovernable
candy-urges surfacing.
Sticky-wet and
panting,
slantingly romancing,
horizontal dancing,
a melting sugar-tangle.
A contest entry
- . . .and because I still have points left. . let's make this a one word prompt, shall we? by jinsays.
736 points, ended January 19, 2009, 14 entries
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amazing!
Amazing! What a great descriptive poem! Beautiful and fun to read!
My only advice is to take out "edible" in the 2nd line, It's kind of redundant... if you know what I mean.
My favorite line is "feats deserving poetry" What a strong line! I wish I had thought of it first! GREAT JOB!
9 out of 10!
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wow...very nice..sexy and sweet. Good write.
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Lustand Love
sticky-wet and panting
i started to imagine all this before you know just to lovers wow amazing write
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Your words...
...dance and flow with intricate design to and fro, showing an expertise and a love for words and fondling them suggestively.
Very, very nice...
Amicus...
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Captivating!
First and third verses..ahem(I hate using this word, but it is due)...OWN! Love, lust, is there a hint of drugs to finish the rock 'n roll trifecta? Your imagery in this is infallible. This is probably my new favorite from you, Kendal. This was my pleasure to read.
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yummy.
this is absolutely yummy. I love this:
Sticky-wet and
panting,
slantingly romancing,
horizontal dancing,
a melting sugar-tangle.
this was a fun read, you've done a great job with this prompt, thank you.
Best wishes and love always,
jin
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