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Violence

Stuck in a perpetual cycle of violence
Scars being left amidst the carnage
Alone I suffer this in silence       
My sanity scattered among the wreckage,

( suffering, alone, helpless )

Frayed and worn its the same old choice
Drown out the memories in this pain       
Feeling lost, alone with this useless voice
It seems that I have finally gone insane,

( tired, lost, frightened )

Why should i get up off the floor
I'd much rather disappear
I just don't want to be hurt anymore
Why can't i get away from here,

( running, fading, falling )

I'll always be by myself i thought
Till they tore me away
Friends that i had always fought
Confronted me and left me with nothing to say

( denying, lying, hiding )

I know that there is no excuse
For this horrible thing i do
This chaotic pattern of recurring self-abuse
That others fail to see is true,

( shamed, shunned, forgotten )

Only my true friends can see whats going on
They can remove me from this hell i live in
This feeling of total despair is gone
As they put my soul back together within,

( healed, saved, loved )

Author notes

Totally new style for me.... i have mixed feelings about the end result but maybe youll like it....

Ronin

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  • Cyanide Dreams
    January 25

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    Hmm, I liked this Ronin. Once again you have put me in a situation where I usually don't like that type of poetry. Good job, and good luck.