I saw myself
~ soul less
in the watery reflection
of a January moon
he saw the rain of my heart
falling as life’s ripples
on the pavement
~ and loved me anyway
Author notes
40 words or less
Prompt ~ January Rain
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 12 entries 40 or less words by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended January 13, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yeah two viewpoints condensing
one liquidic and one concrete, I liked this a lot. ~~~Artis
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How soft and romantic...it is wonderful when we find someone who loves us no matter our faults...
sweet words in brevity.
Thank you for sharing!
mystic
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Gosh, you are good and so well written. I admire your talent.
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Beautiful
Excellent take on the prompt, so soft and romantic.
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Your words are so beautiful and romantic and very true. This is how you know if love is real. Thanks for sharing with us.
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So beautiful ~
This kind of love and romance is deeply coveted in the world
Best of Luck hun
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
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a wonderful take on the promt good luck in the contestmaralisa
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Wow! Just beautiful! Your writing gets so much better by the day.
Best wishes with this.
Gaylene
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We usually just drive through the ripples, huh?! Great turns of phrase(s), makes the meaning so clear~ G
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Beautiful! I love the metaphor! I love everything about your poetry. This is Gold
Much love
Ylova
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