I am
Bare naked; I lay here
Sprawled across the floor.
The trip was incredible.
Something I would do again
Just to feel normal, just to be numb.
The world is laughing next to me.
I am laughing, internally, at the world.
I cannot help myself
As I am
Bare naked; I lay here
Sprawled across the floor.
I have grown roots in this spot.
I have made this my nook.
Only I wish I had left it alone.
Making my bed isn’t something
I wanted to do.
Yet I have to
As I am
Bare naked; I lay here
Sprawled across the floor.
The high wasn’t high enough.
Being good is never good enough.
Even the truth hurts.
Sometimes we deserve more.
We deserve more than the truth
Has offered…
Wishing I was
Bare naked on the floor,
Touching the grace of an angel.
Wishing I was on the side with
Sinister intentions.
Being good was never in the plan.
The plan that never existed
In this world.
At least, no one admitted to it
As the world is
Bare naked; lying exposed
On the floor next to me.
I haven’t decided what to
Make of it yet.
Maybe it is, maybe it isn’t real.
But what I do know
Is that this world will have
To end.
A contest entry
- Nature lovers!!! contest for new poets only!! by Dragotha.
310 points, ended January 22, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GIVE ME YOUR BEST by sanguigno.
1100 points, ended February 15, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 1000 tr0phies! wh00t! by amaranthine lover.
1750 points, ended February 17, 111 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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its really good. i like it
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wow very deep and i really like this you go deep and i like this you use imagry alot i like alot amazing writ
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Wow
I think i will be reading more of your poems they really are unique in a beautiful way..
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I really enjoyed this poem.. It made me Think and alot of poems do not have That ability
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Very beautiful I must say...I really adore this. To not know or knowing of what is there. Laying there in silence as your mind and thoughts corrupt you, is amazing. To not speak or move but to let your mind wonder.....Simply Amazing dear.
"The night is cold as your wrapped around in your own complexed and madeup world"
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One word I can describe this : Unbelievable
This is a very good poem and I love it. Not sure what to say on it though, it is amazingly good and I know what you mean in it. Deep feeling and great emotion. NICE! -
All trips have a destination. I hope you reached yours
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lol i lost myself in this great poem
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love the imagery and i love how you go from one point of view to the other so quickly and yet its subtle
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Incredible imagery, wonderful vision. I love this. I don't think it needs any revision!! ~ Kerri
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Amazzinnnnng.
I like it, at times it would give the reader a slightly..confused feel, but in the end it forced them to use their imagination to figure out what it means.
Yet all the while the true meaning is related to that.
Its one of those poems where it could mean different things to different people.
I liked it, I really did.
I liked the repetitive parts and how they slowly changed.
It was a great write.
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verrry Nice
Good imagery and overall has a morbid yet understandable theme good job, good luck in my contest
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Laying naked exposing all raw nature of things without coverings and disguise bring us to an equal playing field ...I am looking at this poem from the contest Nature lovers. an interesting take on the challenge ... leaving the reader to ponder in thought is it real or ............ Nice one.
Good luck in the contest.
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There is actually a second part that is called Bare Naked. I just like this part the best.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Interesting ~
I rather like the 'bare naked' repetition of this as it gives the sense of vulnerability of the one on the ground; combined with the strength and imagery of the rest of the poem this is a fantastic piece
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