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Fairytales Lost


affirmatively stubborn


I ignored

love's pouring heart
as if time never ended

lost inside my fantasies
of futile fairytales
plastic cinderella slippers
white knight's in flannel

It was that precise moment
I knew

I'd lost
my love

in January rain

 

 

 

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  • Keith Drew gold member
    January 28
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    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4284666


  • EmotionalLandscapes
    January 16

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    This I like!

    The last 5 lines of this work are atmospheric and make the whole piece come alive. The structure also steers the reader to pause exactly in the right places so that the impact on the emotions is maximised. After I read these last 5 lines I felt as though tears might be an appropriate acolade. This I like!


  • bluestoneangel
    January 15
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    enjoyed this poem


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 13

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    Very lovely and creative...the fairytales that never come true or that we seem to be looking the other way when they do...great imagery and metaphor.

    Thank you for sharing!
    mystic


  • oneeye
    January 12
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    Raining nights will do that to you......Hope you have a soft snowing night.


  • Nom de Plume
    January 12

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    but we must dream to succeed... so easy to be lost in them all though... L2 should it be "ignore"... wish you luck in your contest


  • Confusedboy
    January 11

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    Ahhhhhhh Yes

    fantasies of fairy tales deceive many. It seems life flow easily to live in dream land, where life never ends.
    Reality is real, with its pain, short life, sickness, stress, and pressures, all make realities less desirable to face. lol. Its the real life, all we have today, make wise use of it, it is a valuable asset, not to be wasted on dreams. Beautiful poem that touches the heart, deeply. May you be protected from the rain, even the January rain. While there is yet time, use it well, wisely, there are no tomorrows, in reality.


  • Truetome
    January 11

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    heart tangles dear, you alway seem to be on topic. smiles. i really enjoy your poetries. with L, ♥ pour tu'

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