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[ when i see her smile i feel like im mobile, ]

when i see her smile i feel like im mobile,
when i see her smile i feel liek makeing a freestyle
when i see her smile i feel like i wanna run a mile,
all the while i feel senile, i feel like a reptile in a sand pile
shes very gentile, shes very textile, shes worth all the while even if it takes up all my time at least i know i had the chance she could be mine...

what should I improve?

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