“If it is the moment that's rushes
when the time sets on rest.
Then its not madness that rushes in
but the craze that slows down the serenity.”
Eyes form the heavens above glare at my thoughts
my hands move in its own mastery.
My thoughts convey their own misery
and I am lost to my own senses;
The power granted to me.
The sake of sanity opposes insanity
the nirvana of emotions,
blur and ballistic
escapes me.
From the havens above the eyes that twinkle
glare at my soul replenishing the sky deep with in its frozen time.
Deep lies a hidden ecstasy a drive to be pushed away.
Just to be one in which I shall pursue my lust.
just as time rolls and flies like this industrial dust.
With all that tainted love and hate brushes through the horizon
I will stand up right and walk this torment way.
And then there a moment comes to being
When the time sinks
And blaze through which it burns comes to symmetry
And the craze brazes through you
Leaving sanity
The only thing that hides with in that moment is your junoon
Author notes
i know junoon.. its in urdu. which means craze to it limits. its not necessary to the ultimate stage of love.. it something more like a thin line between sanity and insanity. if the craze is in the line of sanity its junoon and when its crosses the line its majnoon
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- The last stage of any madness, thinkings, feelings, words and more and more by The.poet.of.hearts.
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Kindly improve your thought process
you could have written much more emotionally if you had the janoon of a sufi saint.
But then you write for...; ending with the terrific word majnoo.
Congrats.
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lol..junoon of a sufi saint. u kow music is not allowed in islam. the only time it is when it is in marriage only for women and not sure of this one but when soldiers come back victorious.
point i noticed is its how sufi people sing... so emotionally.. not exactly their lyrics... it be real funny if i write one in English one word repeated 12 times.
can u explain me what do u meant by thought process ?? i would like to know that. thanks for ur applauds -
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Theme process into emotions.
Think of love for God only and with the janoon for meeting him you keep dancing to words tunes and create a unique atmosphere to attempt to blend with nothing but God.
If you have seen the picture Jodha Akbar and the controlled dance of the sufi's you will realize that janoon has no limits including sanity.
Of course with a majnoo it is no limits in insanity.
Always remember janoon is what comes from your inside beyond the mind reaching out for the ultimate God.
If you attempt to write with real janoon there can be no language barriers.
That is what I think.
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your are right in khuwaja mere khuwaja they portrait the song well but its not necessarily junoon. junoon can be unrequited love but love not necessarily be junoon. in the song they portrait love toward's walli khuwaja and their language was beautiful.there are no language barriers but also there were are not any grammatical errors or awkward sentences. in your comment your portraying junoon for god.. i am just portraying junoon _ in english closest words to it is mania i think. englsih is lil rigid language compare to urdu parsi and arabic and middle eastern languages if i write as u ask me then there is a probability that i might not convey what is aksed for but convey what i feel for.. so i am portraying my junoon not junoon.
i still did not get thought process i understood theme process are they both the same thing you are talking about? -
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Thought process;
When ever I comment I take the whole poem into consideration with the title being a guiding star.
Nirvana and Janoon lol cannot ever be without Gods wishes.Like 'Khuwaja"...."Khuwaja" if I were to just keep repeating "God"..."God" surely people may say I am mad in janoon; implying closer to God in steps to nirvana.
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Theme=8.0
Idea=7.5
Emotions=7.0
Feelings=6.0
Words=7.0
Background=6.8
Title=6.2
Passion=6.5
Interest=7.5
Showing the Junoon=7.5
"Eyes form the heavens above glare at my thoughts
my hands move in its own mastery.
My thoughts convey their own misery
and I am lost to my own senses;
The power granted to me.
The sake of sanity opposes insanity
the nirvana of emotions,
blur and ballistic
escapes me."
The Brief Comment remained due on me,
So, here it is, you have done Fantastic with you piece, it was the one I read about 10 times, I was just dipped inside it, it made me feel the Real feelings of poetry, you did pretty Wonderful, I loved it
but in the first line, is it FROM , or FORM?
I will favor FROM
It's my way to judge my contest's entry
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The poet of hearts and beautiful words
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like your way
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very excellent write-strong
And then there a moment comes to being
When the time sinks
And blaze through which it burns comes to symmetry
And the craze brazes through you
Leaving sanity
The only thing that hides with in that moment is your junoon
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thanks a lot for your sweet words and applauds dear.
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Oye, you doesn't need any author notes, you have already given, Sorry
I didn't see
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fantastic write
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I think i have been in that place where one blink and you will go mad, it's the place where my creative side lives, also where my scream hides!
i enjoyed this very much,had to read it a few times but each time it revealed more of itself.
Good to see you are still writing
Barbara
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hey barb.. its been so long since i heard anything from you. how are you??
well thanks for comment and applauds dear.. i am happy that you read my work
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hey barb.. its been so long since i heard anything from you. how are you??
well thanks for comment and applauds dear.. i am happy that you read my work
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hey barb.. its been so long since i heard anything from you. how are you??
well thanks for comment and applauds dear.. i am happy that you read my work
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