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Crying

I love you too much to say it
But I cant talk to you without

Crying cause your so far away
Inhaling heavily just to be okay
Wishing you were here

Smiling cause you know me
Shuttering cause it not fair
That I have to hold on to every word

Afraid to let go
Because Im afraid you dont know
How much I love you

Please tell me what you think

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  • Reanna Eryn
    March 22

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    Beautiful. This stole my breath away. I love how you say you are inhaling to be content, but you still wish this person was there. Magnificent.

  • KaylynKhaotic
    March 9

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    Very well thought out. Congrats!

    Wow. Even though this is very simple it has a great impact. you have a great use of paowerful words, and they show true feeling.


  • DelaneyDisaster
    February 28

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    Aww.. This is really good.. It makes me think about someone a lot. And that's good.. This is very powerful and well written. Good job.


  • Desdmona
    February 17

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    Goodness!

    How I feel for this person. Very relatable. Anyone with a broken heart can relate.I'm a big crier myself (although I don't watnt to be) and this sums a lot of those tears up. Great job.


  • carebear123
    February 5

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    this is so full of meaning. i love it! it takes a really good poet to be able to bring such meaning into a poem thats so short. I love that! i love that i can feel the emotion in your write. it amazes me.good job!=)


  • fairytalelovestory
    February 2

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    Afraid to let go
    Because Im afraid you dont know
    How much I love you

    Exactly how I feel right now


  • x.Kayla.x
    January 20
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    GOOD (:

    This is really good.
    Read my poems pleasee..
    Thankss

    - K a y l a a


  • Lanasaur
    January 12

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    awww

    this is a sweet strong poem well done and keep penning the great work i can also feel emotion in this poem


  • serenity silvermoon
    January 11

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    very sad and i feel for you the ones that really love us know us the most this was a very sad poem and i hope you will find the wisdom to say you love this person and if you ever need anyone to talk to ill be here

  • ElectricBloom
    January 11

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    this is beautiful, so full of love and raw emotion.
    you hold morbid and gorgeous imagery throughout.

    a few suggestions though!
    in the 3rd stanza i would change cause to because as in the 4th stanza you use because
    also in the first line you have your to's mixed up
    it should be

    I love you too much to say it

    these are just my suggestions though!
    i think this is a beautiful poem, and i truly enjoyed reading it.

    ElectricBloom

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