joshua you are a gift of life
born into this world so small
you are precious and beautiful
with a bright future in front of you
As you grow up you will always
be loved and cherished
and may you blossom
into a wonderful man
knowing your family
loves you and always will
you have a wonderful way
Of putting us at ease...
you do these little things
that gives us comfort
And you remind us
how special you are
when i see your little smile
You brighten up my day
when you laugh
You light up the room
from auntie margaret
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please tell me the truth and if anything is wrong let me know as it is getting stenciled on his wall
this is a poem to my nephew it is going on his nursery wall and wondered what you think please
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Just remember to capitalize the 'i's' - but otherwise, what a nice write and great idea to have it stenciled on his wall! Wonderful! It's bright and cheery, and hopefully you'll put it down on a paper copy for when he gets to his preteens or before and wants all that "mushy stuff" gone.
But well done! I should write some more poems for my nephews....
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that's so sweet. I'm going to be an autie myself, but it's a girl, Emma Rose, due in March. I realy liked reading this, it was wonderful
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Emma Rose is a beautiful name...
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I loved this happy poemie ...
and the love reflected by each line. I simply KNOW you are a beautiful and caring auntie. And ... will be a wondrous Mommy one day!
All the best to you, precious Margaret.
Love
Myra
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i think this is a truly wonderful poem,
it's so sweet and full of love - it put a huge smile on my face =]
however i feel if you change a few of the line breaks it will read a lot smoother. like here :
As you grow up you will
always be loved and cherished
it you put always after will it will read easier ;
As you grow up you will always
be loved and cherished
and here :
and you remind us how
special you are
to
and you remind us
how special you are
i also think adding in some puctuation, maybe even just a few commas, would also make this easier to read - these are just my suggestions though =] it is beautiful the way it is. joshua is a very lucky to have such a beautiful poem written about him!
ElectricBloom
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