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With Apologies to Taigu Ryokan

New car, better job
Running after them we're lost-
Gone are love and God

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http://allpoetry.com/opoem/62785-Taigu-Ryokan-I-Watch-People-In-The-World-

I read this and liked it, and since theft is the new innovation I thought I'd just adapt it.

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  • drifting cloud silver member
    January 22, 2009
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    Excellent! We value the valueless.


  • Bruce silver member
    January 11, 2009

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    Djinn - Truly spoken, my friend, and this is a lesson most do not learn until they are far older than you, if they learn it at all. Nice poem!