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From the Rivers of Babylon

Missing image

Heavens open

mountains part

lowlands freeway 

slopes assist

movements welcome,

wet evolving,

torrents heaving

storms persist.

 

Heathens bearing,

fountains start

a softlands flood

disrupts content

to hollow fill

directives flow

a river beying

there you go.

 

 

 

Author notes

Oh God ! How do you make rivers flowing towards the oceans...Unknown.

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  • Bride Of Hate
    January 22

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    This is very lovely. And also quite accurate too! A really nice piece that flows well and uses a short and sweet form. Evokes wonderful imagery! Great work!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 16

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    So beautifullly poetic flow is bringing the meaning of the journey of this life..the immages are very strongly built ..well done...


  • Venugopal gold member
    January 11
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    as a hydrologist, I really liked the way you penned the poem


  • Amera gold member
    January 11

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    This is not your typical style but I really, really like it! The flow and the natural meter or cadence makes this poem simply dance off the reader's lips. The imagery in the pictures you provided pales next to the poem.

    Love,
    Amera♥