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Susan's Slip


Forgetting the ice ‘neath the snow,
my friend ventured out to the yard,
to take the tree to the curb --
slipped and sat down, very hard.

She said that she knew she’d look silly
if she tried to get back on her feet,
so grabbing the tree she slid
right down the hill ... on her seat.

She said she’d not had such fun
since she was a very young girl --
but now she might even be tempted
to try and give sledding a whirl.

The mystery may never be solved:
I doubt the neighbors understood
she was getting a quite early start ...
on a "Second” childhood.

Author notes



Susan is one of those rare people who is intrinsically destined to always look for the positive in any negative situation, so that was no stretch for her. Now I'm waiting to see if she decides to take up sledding at fifty plus years old.


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  • Hikari Lady
    July 8

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    I really liked the way you told the story and your flow was almost perfect. A lesson is learned from this as well as a smile. It's thoughts provoking!


    Love
    ~Noor

  • Topnotchsy
    February 28

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    This is a really cute story, but it also contains a nugget or advice for life, on looking for the good in everything. I did find that the background made it a little difficult to read the poem (I would up highlighting it with my mouse to make it easier to read.)

    • ecrivain01
      February 28
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      Yes ...

      I see your point. Maybe I'll change it.

      Thanks again for stopping by.


  • MargaretG
    January 30

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    This is a sweet poem for the depth of winter. I'm happy that Susan's fall could be turned to fun, it is not always the case, but speaks strongly about her character, especially her sense of humour. The last line is a glint of your own, a pleasure to read.


  • Age of Rain
    January 27
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    This was both amusing and written with a good flow. A nice poem to be sure


  • Heart Sutra
    January 14

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    don't you just love and adore people who are always looking for the positive? I do. what a great poem!


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    January 12

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    Adorable piece

    Hey, there's always a plus side to everything, and a smile is the first help alert to every situation

    it's great to be reading your muse again Jim, very nicely done my friend, best wishes!

    many blessings, Sandi

    • ecrivain01
      January 13
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      Thanks.

      First thing I've written in a month or so. Susan got a kick out of it at any rate.

  • Judith Chandler
    January 12

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    I hope she does take up sledding as encouragement to some of us who are just so scared to falling on black ice.

    Good luck to her and a nice write.


  • Aesthete
    January 11
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    great ending homie! loved it

    • ecrivain01
      January 11
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      Certainly not ...

      my best poem, but at least I broke the jinx. First thing I've written in nearly a month.

      Thanks for stopping by.


  • suseann
    January 11

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    Nah! Not second childhood. Exercising keeps the body fit. And uninhibited good clean fun is good for the mind. This was an adorable poem and humorous.Those peering through the closed blinds wish they could.

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