Thoughts are a provoked knife
slicing away at the minuet hand,
drinking violence like Clockwork
Orange, peeled, and nothing turns
me on like organized chaos and
mystery, don't just stand there, and
try to figure out how to be human,
throw it against the wall, throw me
against the wall, there is no reason,
to just be simple.
Author notes
Prompt: 10 Lines or less
Word: Nymphos
Eh.....
Dont we all wish we had that
one moment?
Haha... theres gotta be some
truth in that.
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 LINES or Less (N) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended January 31, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a good piece of poetry which you have presented here, organised chaos, would you like fries with that? the madness of notions that slip the mind into deep oceans where each splash sends shivers of time through the soul.
- was that hard enough? 
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It is scary and also beautiful. I have no idea what is going on in these line, but I like it anyway.
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Amazing!
I am awestruck! Nice going dear sissy! =D -
Holy hell, this is sexy! haha. I mean, not in the regular way. There's not a single cliche, as there are usually several in most poems like this. I think it's brilliant, personally. I particularly adore the first two lines.
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Hello!!!! Thank you for the comment, you've got
me blushing... I think its only because there was
something personal about this write, although I try
not to get personal when I write.
And how are you doing????
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aye, let's throw life and love against the wall and watch the mad splatter it makes, a work of art for sure.
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Whatever is going on here I like it. It is scary and also beautiful. The words bring to mind a Stephen King nightmare.
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Haha thanks, I like Stephen King also.
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yep that word never simple an uncontrollable force and you portrayed it wonderfully. "don't just stand there, and
try to figure out how to be human, throw it against the wall, throw me against the wall," Wow Bravo!
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Opening is tantamount to a poetic orgy..."Thoughts are a provoked knife" (I would say very sharp, but the pun falls flat). The whole damn thing is terrific! Fav part,
"and nothing
turns me on like organized chaos and
mystery, don't just stand there, and
try to figure out how to be human,
throw it against the wall, throw me
against the wall,"
Love that undertow of badassness!
Another fantastic write! Geo
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WOW!
Short, sweet, and to the point! hehe
Very well done, and you are quite talented!
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Haha ironically, this is the only short poem I am proud of, glad you like
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clockwork orange peeled.... throw me against the wall.... Hell YEah. dig it gal, keep em flowin.
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This one snaps our mind around like it's being plummented with disco balls
But I can dig it and I found it to be a very nicely done piece
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Hey thank you for the comment. Very clever I like the disco ball comment you made.
Made me smile!
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Loved this one, liked the reference of "A clockwork orange"...so nympho...Nicely written...
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Hey I'm glad you like
I don't hear from you often, how are you doing?
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I really enjoyed the fact that you threw Clockwork Orange in there. It's a wonderful book and film!
All in all, very well written, and thought provoking...
What else can I say? Nothing less than what I've come to expect!
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Haha thanks for the comment, I am glad you caught on to the whole Clockwork Orange statement in the poem.
I was hoping somebody would recognize it.
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Wow! gets a thumbs up from me!
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It is very thick and progresses with little jumps. I had a little fun trying to keep up with the pace.
~J. Pronek
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