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[ Sun come up one day, ]

 
 
 
 
Sun come up one day,
crops grew, sky was blue. Eros flew
and night descended.

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  • Harrisham Minhas
    January 17

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    Thanks for your entry:

    "Sun come up one day,
    crops grew, sky was blue. Eros flew
    and night descended."

    Nicely done.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas



  • AniLee
    January 11
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    ....pretty....
    short
    and
    sweet


  • heart shaped box
    January 11
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    very nice haiku,
    great job