You left me here with nothing to my name,
All your words were just part of your game.
You took my hand,
You told me lies,
How could I doubt you with your pleading eyes?
I'm broken, I'll never be whole again.
I'm torn apart, there's nothing left of my bleeding heart.
I'm broken.
You promised me you'd never break my heart,
Now you're gone, my world just fell apart.
You promised me you'd
Catch me when I fall.
But you're the one that pushed me and you don't care at all.
Author notes
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C i a r r a i - M a n n i n g
This poem is about the second time I was left by my ex boyfriend of almost two years. These were the words I wish I could have told him to his face...but was too heartbroken to.
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Is your real username Anonymized?
Cool!
I really liked this entry. I can honestly relate to this lately.
It made me feel hurt, and that's what my contest is all about, making me feel what the poem feels.
Thanks for entering and best of luck
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I'm broken, I'll never be whole again.
I'm torn a part, there's nothing left of my bleeding heart.
I'm broken.
personally I would remove the second stanza and put it at the end,delete the first I'm broken and leave a bigger gap to the last and add an exclamation mark.
I'll never be whole again.
I'm torn a part,
there's nothing left of my bleeding heart.
I'm broken!
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Hmmmm, interesting, I'll consider that. Thanks for the input! Though that second stanza is in the middle because this poem was written as a song. I guess though, for poetic purposes, it would be better at the end. Thanks
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awesome, really like this, kinda sad but totally amazing. great job and thanks for entering
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thanks for the nice entry
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Wow. The heartbroken feeling and loneliness vibrates through the words down to my core. I loved it and thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.
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this is just incredible. the last few lines especially, just caught my emotions so well. i can really relate, and i love the style in which this is written.
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Oooooooooo this is nice. I feel like knowing you shows how this theme tends to be repeated with you, and I don't think any of us enjoy when you have these feelings. Truly great though, and plenty of us can agree with this from some past experiences.
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This is very good. Reading it tugged at my heart because I'm dealing with the same emotions. You've depicted the pain and thought processes very well.
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"You promised me you'd
Catch me when I fall.
But you're the one that pushed me and you don't care at all."
My favorite lines
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