You bring the birthday cake,
and I’ll bring my party dress,
and then you’ll kiss Jenny with gentle finesse.
Brazenly boring,
she’s brazenly pouring
her tears on the candles
you kindled with loving,
loving the loving in your loving hands.
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Out, out, brief candle.
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Oh, but ain’t that the story-
you try and you try
and she’ll cry and she’ll cry,
but where’s the goodbye?
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If I didn’t know any better,
I’d say she has you wrapped around her pinky finger.
But I know better-
she’s got her pinky finger wrapped
around your throat.
Squeezing,
oh, baby,
tighter,
oh, oh, baby.
I guess that’s the way that you like it,
huh, baby?
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You writing love letters,
trying to invoke The Beatles.
But she doesn’t love you,
yeah, yeah, yeah.
‘Cause she’s in the bedroom,
making love with the television,
watching old reruns of
All My Children and
General Hospital and
Desperate Housewives,
yeah, yeah, yeah.
I guess you can’t buy love with a birthday cake.
Author notes
I took the prompt, and wrote about an unhappy marriage. Love is given, but not recieved.
A contest entry
- He/ She Doesn't Love Me Back. by Poetryintheblood.
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great funny insightful
love your choice of words .
too true about unreqited love writeen with such creativity well done im new here a pleasure to read
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Awesome; i liked this write a lot very well wrote. thanks for entering
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Awesome, I can write something positive without having to lie! You're pretty funny, love the characature!
"You writing love letters,
trying to invoke The Beatles"
And some pretty sharp stuff-
'I guess that’s the way that you like it,
huh, baby?'
You've gotta have that with any semi-tragedy, if it doesn't make you smile why bother reading the melodramatic tripe? Good job. -
Excellent! I love your poetry - your style is just what I strive to achieve within my own. Great use of repetition and song structure - I like the tone very much.
Thank you for commenting my "Beautiful" poem - I've just got round to seeing who wrote such lovely words on my work.
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AMAZING.
I love this!
God, this would be a brilliant song!
I wish my band would have thought of it xD
Bravo! =) <33
Mai
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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