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Dads Angel

Dad'S Angel
The day you died
we were all by your side.

You were so sick,
The time went by tic tic.

You were so full of fright,
You were not ready to give in to the light.

But then our little boy looked up at the sky,
And then I saw a look of peace in your eyes.

Then I kissed you goodbye,
And then you died.

And then our little boy said mom,
dad will be ok,
Because I saw his angel today.

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  • thepoetssoul
    January 23

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    This is beautiful...
    Losing a father is very hard.
    Thank you for sharing your heart and spirit.

    Tony

  • imjustme213
    January 11

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    A good job

    I liked the ending and how the sense of pain and loss, was replaced with peace.
    Which reminds me, in the line
    "And then I saw a look of piece in your eyes."
    Piece, should be peace.
    Overall a good poem that was well written, and showed the emotions well.