disjointed --
everything black and white and
continuously moving
jumping around in my line of sight
undulating blindspots, shadows
filmy darkness
stray light blinking
haunting me
my fingers are bubblegum;
they stick to my eyes --
release me!
patterns - sounds -
thoughts colliding -
voices shriek
and I reply
but they cannot hear me
any consolation?
refuge?
"I have come to kidnap you
beneath panes of glass
and silent screams, madness --
you are mine. you are
mine."
please, won't someone
release me from the
curse of the tangled mind?
Author notes
This was meant to sound chaotic and jumbled.
I researched schizophrenia for one of my classes at school.
And I called my paper "Schizophrenia: The Curse of the Tangled Mind"
A contest entry
- ♥QUICKIE♥ !!! by Kathraina.
700 points, ended January 11, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A strong write that conveys a sense of powerlessness. "the curse of the tangled mind" You definitely made it sound "chaotic and jumbled"
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I like the image of a tangled mind.
And I like how you chose schizophrenia as a subject,
however, it was formatted a bit odd.
but I did like it
Good write! -
Sarah. You are a schizo! I've just decided.
Although, you are the best poet writer that I've ever met in person, so bonus points to you and such. -
I like this. You did a great job at description. My uncle is schizophrenic and frankly he scares me sometimes... you wrote it perfect for jumbled feelings. Well deserved gold here.
Laura
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Very cool theme for a poem! Congrats on the gold!
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amazing
gold well deserved
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love it
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Wow, great job! Love the concept! You did really really well. I like the idea of schizophrenia with the prompt. Very tangled indeed! Bravo, and good luck!
♥ Kathraina
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