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things that fall out of the sky remind me of him

one.
magical eclipses are formed from behind
my eyelids and a pearl-lit smile erodes
from beneath my lips and I realize that
I’m in heaven as long as I’m dreaming of you

two.
your fingers imitate summer rain-showers
against my skin, & I still represent a never
ending blizzard that’s seeping from my pores,
& together we make a natural disaster.

three.
you are the stars that light my darkest nights
and the gentle breezes that slip in between
the space between my fingers and it feels like something
is missing when I can't hear you say

I love you too

four.
I don't know what to say to you about us.
because every time I try, I want to say that
I want to make my own constellation with
you and name it imperfection because as long
as I am the way I am, nothing can be perfect

Author notes

this is also a journal thingy but eh. its just a feeling i have

A contest entry

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  • snakebites
    July 16

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    i loved this writing so much, especially the first stanza. it's so beautiful.
    you have loads of talent and so much emotion.
    and i love your use of words.
    amazing job. love it.

    ♥


  • Symphony
    April 21
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    Thye imagery in this poem was incrediably vivid and vibrant - seriously, although it was a bit long for my tastes, you just totally involved yourself in the poem and brought it to life ... wow.

    thanks for entering, and congrats on all the previous trophies


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    February 6

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    Second time around, this is still awesome. Great imagery and emotion, as you delve into the world of relationships.

    Great piece and congrats on the trophies


  • frozenblackpetals
    February 4
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    loved the 'one two three' thing, really powerful. great write!
    thanks for entering!!!


  • new born
    January 16

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    This is INCREDIBLE. I'm serious. I love this so much I don't know what to say. The imagery was beautiful and so vivid and the emotion flowed through perfectly. It's...alive. I think that's the best way to describe it.
    'I want to make my own constellation with
    you and name it imperfection because as long
    as I am the way I am, nothing can be perfect'
    These were my favorite lines. Amazing job.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    January 14
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    fantastic piece
    i loved the imagery


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 11

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    *sigh* So Beautiful! An absolutely lovely piece. So much pure love emanating from it.

    "i want to make my own constellation with
    you"

    Brilliant! Great job and best of luck to you!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • Kiss the girl--x
    January 11
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    'three.
    you are the stars that light my darkest nights
    and the gentle breezes that slip in between
    the spaces between my fingers and feels like
    somethings missing when i can't hear you say
    i love you too'

    i love that, it's so sad, but the whole piece is so beautiful.

    hope you're okie.
    ♥


    • edit my world.
      January 11
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      i'm fine actually ^_^
      he told me that he loved me again which made my heart flutter so when i wrote this i was waiting for him to get off of work. i can never really tell him how i feel sometimes which is prolly why its so sad.

      • Kiss the girl--x
        January 11
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        oooh, i'm glad things are going goody

        ashley & i are running into everything & telling eachother we love eachother, whilst knowing in ten months we're going to be a country apart. i blame him
        stuff sucks sometimes.

        ooh alliteration >.<

        i'm such a loser =/

        hope you're okie
        ♥

        • edit my world.
          January 11
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          aww if its meant to be it'll work itself out...that phrase is starting to get old.
          you're not a loser...now mr. ashley..is a loser ^_^ in my opinion.


  • ToxicSuicide
    January 10
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    This is great! Thank you so much for entering and good luck!
    ~ToxicSuicide.

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