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The Everything I Can't Remember


How is it that we measure the distance from
here to there? How did a once concrete
memory’s colors, archived in song lyrics and
YouTube quotes, bleed but a faint outline of a ghost?

I remember how I once could count each
yellow tick-mark from here to New Jersey, and how
there’s still a molten gold trail of streetlights (all of them
pressed against a moving window pane).

Whose iPod was plugged in then? What are
all these songs I sing, but know not the name of?
When was it that my mouth stopped guessing
the right words and hardened her soft eyes?

What color were they again? O loathsome me!
Why do I remember all impressions, but
no specifics? Such is my obsession: changing
with each passing mile; green, blue, gray.

She doesn’t notice them herself. Fireworks explode
and tidal waves drown Long Island miracle miles,
but we barely even realize it, blind in smiles,
trusting that the streetlights will stay lit ’til we die.

But at dark times like these I sure could use
a nice photograph. We never did photograph well,
you and I. I suppose a good photo requires
sobriety. Streetlights and midnights are harder to capture.

 

 

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  • Antebellum
    August 18

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    But at dark times like these I sure could use
    a nice photograph. We never did photograph well,
    you and I. I suppose a good photo requires
    sobriety.

    wow.
    love this part.
    Really like the questioning.
    fantastic write.
    thanks for entering


  • Symphony
    April 26
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    WOW, this was FAB-ulous to read, I mean ..

    All those thoughts, those unasked questions, how did you come up with them - and to string them together so eloquently, so fast flowing so that there's literally no break in the reading ... wow!

    Excellent write, thanks for entering *rose8


  • katie-jo
    February 3

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    I love this poem.
    I love your questioning and the shuffled word order; it's unique and something I'm not used to, which is amazing.

    thanks so much for the entry,
    --red


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    January 30

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    nice write - the poem is filled with sad words and to preserve the memories somehow. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • SeaWithYourHeart
    January 26

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    "but we barely even realize it; blind in smiles;
    trusting that the streetlights will stay lit ’till we die.

    But at dark times like these I sure could use
    a nice photograph. We never did photograph well,
    you and I. I suppose a good photo requires
    sobriety. Streetlights and midnights are harder to capture."

    These lines were so passionate and sad in a way but the beauty of the sadness is you remember what it felt like which is what you meant by streetlights and midnights were harder to capture. so your saying that photos are unable to record what are most important. that was beautiful.


    congratulations this was beautifully written.


  • Threnoidia
    January 25

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    i like how its modernized. great diction, molten gold trail of street lights nice

    i love the theme. i see where it's going. and free verse suits this best for the semi confusion and wonder of the speaker in this poe


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 24
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    Janette likes this poem!!!


  • Akarian silver member
    January 20

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    Wow... this speaks to me so strongly "What are
    all these songs I sing, but know not the name of?" is just a pefect line. You and I seem to write alot alike, I love it. =D


  • ToxicSuicide
    January 11

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    This is great. It almost sings with regret from the words. Anyways, thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
    ~ToxicSuicide.


  • wanderingpaths
    January 10
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    THIS IS REALLY GOOD.
    GOOD JOB.
    I LIKE THIS.


  • Darkimagination
    January 10

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    Excellent

    Wow this is a stunning piece with a unique and yet very effective style. The images were dazzling and the words seem so subtle and yet powerful at the same time. I got a sense of city life and the chaos there that perhaps is only a series of lights and music where real things can get lost in its maze, and love can go unnoticed or die because of the distractions it holds. Not sure if this is what you meant but that's what I got from it. Anyway thoroughly enjoyed reading this original piece, you have talent my friend!!!

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