I wonder,
am I the only one to look at
a summer sky and see the birds? Or
are all of you really just stuck on
the distance between it and this
pathetic ground we stand upon.
wishing you were that
high
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at night, I sometimes dream that
there is more to all of this than
this.
but I find in the morning, the walls,
that have permanently built themselves
around my mind, closed in
just a little bit more.
at school, they become
a box instead
*
every once and a while I can capture meaning sitting blankly
on the edges of everyone’s words. but when I pluck them off,
more gently than I would an already burnt lily, they just whisper
infidelities, inside a vase painted black and white, so no sun
could ever shine through the depths of shallow water
*
and all your
promises
could be broken into
sentences,
into words and
letters
and pointless
sounds
you don't know
that the belief of
english and spoken-word
lingers as
"pointless"
in the air here
*
when I walk through the doors everyday, there is weight immediately on my shoulders. it’s heavier than any of the barbells in the gym, and holds more judgement then them too. it contains every wish, every stress, every thought that may be running through a building full of broken minds, just waiting for life to repair
slowly, my spine, begins to mutate under the pressure,
until I no longer have
a backbone,
like everyone else. like everyone else
*
I still hope
behind all these dull expression faces,
there is depth
and if I were to believe
for one second , then I could reach inside
and find a real person
*
time slows,
when it hasn't even hit you at all
yet
Author notes
Maybe I just matured faster. Maybe its my school. Maybe I am being whiny. Or maybe I am just being egotistical.
One things of sure: I can't wait to
get out.
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by: Ryno
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Happy Year Anniversary 
A contest entry
- it's been a year. by aanika.
6011 points, ended January 30, 33 entries
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Comments
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Freaking crazy! In the best of ways! Did I not see a trophy up there? Should have won something! Even a damned HM would have done! Hopefully you can enter this in a PW contest and win something that way....
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"wishing you were that high" haha, I loved that
I really adored how every vignette seemed like it had a different style, format-wise and expression-wise. It has such a great impact while reading. Fantastic
Jeanette*~
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i liked this
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Your title's completely genius.
Damn you.
"Or
are all of you really just stuck on
the distance between it and this
pathetic ground we stand upon.
wishing you were that
high"
I love the tone of that; it's so...scathing.
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"every once and a while I can capture meaning sitting blankly
on the edges of everyone’s words."
I thought that was insanely strong...
...I think I've tried to write something that captured that meaning, but failed to.
You're seriously kick-assssssssssssssss.
"and find a real person"
Wow.
;
Jessica
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okay you've really got to stop being so nice to me.
what does "scathing" mean? lol!
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"1. bitterly severe, as a remark: a scathing review of the play.
2. harmful, injurious, or searing."
Can't stop telling the truth man.
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Excelent
you've said everything i was thinking and more. congratulations on a fantastic write. keep up the good work
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High school?
I agree entirely.
My school irritates me to pieces.
Too many people on drugs or addicted to alcohol or cussing every other word. Too many people not thinking and starting fights for no reason and slamming people into walls.
And I'm attending a private Christian school. How ironic.
Anyway, I understand every word of this.
And can really relate, obviously.
This was remarkable.
I think you've matured faster.
And maybe it's partially your school as well.
Best of luck in the contest,
though you don't need it.
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haha! well so much for my dream of going to a private christian school, in hopes it would be better!!
yup - my school has all the same - and I literally don't think anyone cares about anyone but themselves. and those are the people that I go bonkers being around, unfortunately.
thanks for reading my rant. I really needed to get if off my chest.
good luck at your school! -
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Well, believe me, it's better than the public school I used to attend, but still far from perfect.
I agree. The symptom of our generation is self-centeredness.. the whole "the universe revolves around me so get used to it" idea..
Of course! Believe me, many times people at my school - especially those that shamelessly gossip - make me want to rant for hours.
You're a senior, yes?
I am. Only one more year. Well, one semester at this point.
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I am not sure what a senior is, because that is not how us Canadians roll but, I am grade eleven, which I think would make me a Junior? I am a Senior in Canadian terms: Grade 7-9 is Junior and 10 - 12 is a senior. So I still got three whole semesters, and they are even longer then your guys' are
Phew. Thats good. Maybe I can still keep the dream alive then ?
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Ah. Eleventh grade. One younger than me.
No fair. You're younger but better at writing. *sticks out tongue at you*
I would still endorse attending a private Christian school. Not EVERYONE at my school is addicted to drugs/alcohol/etc. I've found many good friends and encouraging teachers. :]
Wow. Violent much? well, they will get what they deserve in the scope of eternity; I agree.
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MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
ya, I get... violent-minded at times. I can have anger issues we will say. luckily I haven't gotten into a fight - and I would like to keep it that way. I just get so ticked at said types of people at my school.
& no way. I am not better than you.
and I will look into it. at this point I really want to switch schools, but it could just be because I am frustrated. -
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I can get rather frustrated/angry/enraged at times.
But I'm really quite pitiful when it comes to getting mad.
I either have to storm off or rant amid a flood of tears.
It's not fun. >.<
And yes way, you are.
I would still advocate switching schools. It might help your disposition even the slightest bit. Once again, no place is perfect, but in reference to my school, overall I love it there and would rather spend my last year of high school there than anywhere else. -
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I am hoping that I can do it for my last year ...
And ya. We all have our different ways of coping - someways more.... stronger then others?
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