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When you locked yourself inside.

We went to the market place, we went to the town,
walked down streets and shopped together,
you were never down.
We had lunch at the Bento Stand, soda's at the Mick
we could always laugh and relate
then you got so sick.

I watched as your hair grew dry, and fell away in patches
watched as your eyes lost their luster
saw those painful scratches
the ones you had inflicted with nails left to long
on fingers thin as pipe cleaners
which used to be so strong

I tried talking like we had, but you were never there
I pleaded for you to come back
we still had much to share

You always were my favorite, beautiful to me
since you were just a tiny thing
I couldn't let you be
I had all the best  times, whatever we had done
but someone else had so hurt you
I hated that someone

But, it was love for him which made you run from me
into silent rejection
and we could never be
I miss you so, my dearest one, when will you return
the veins are blue through translucent skin
a desperate sight to see

You've grown so thin, so frail is your wilted energy
I fear you soon will melt away
 snowflake from yesterday.

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  • Sandygram
    January 13

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    Stunning Poem!

    WOW!!!!! I can see why this won gold. It so deserved it. A very sad story that touches the heart. Amazing imagery that draws the reader into the sadness and heartbreak. Thank you for sharing with us. Take care. Hugs and Smiles, Sandy


  • Denerica
    January 11

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    Heartwrenching

    Was hoping for a happier ending...loved how you ended it though, beautiful, captivating, definately favored for the gold. Blessings.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    January 11

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    Oh how sad! What a poignant piece this is and yes, quite a beautiful ending.
    Congratulations on the well deserved gold
    Gaylene


  • echo-ink
    January 10

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    What a wonderful poem, and then the surprising ending was fantastic.
    I love poems with a twist ending.

  • starving-to-survive
    January 10
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    sorry i never saw the bit saying which poem inspired this! just saw in now lol

  • starving-to-survive
    January 10

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    absolutly fantastic. I love this. What poem have you been inspired from? just out of curiosity. You have so much talent. I cant stop crying! i have a friend very close to me who basicly has said everything you wrote here to me. Thank you so much for entering this contest it means a lot to me. You are a fantastic writer, the flow and emotion in this are just perfect keep up the good work. Please let me know who you are too....i would love to read some more of you stuff

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