What stands apart from You, what have I got?
I do not wish to enter where you are not.
I find all that I need and much more in You
this is my 'official' stance and it's my view.
So do not let me drift-untethered-far away
this'd be a load-disatrous to handle any day.
My whole existence I do and must find in You.
Please wrap me, it's only You I would pursue.
Inside clouds of joy or morbid, solid sorrow
it's You today, yesterday and again tomorrow.
I cannot ascertain another road to roam,
You are my forever God, my forever home.
When thoughts of lesser gods seek me out.
When I'm assailed by persistant, costly doubt...
I'll still remain true, faithful, solely in tact,
where can I go? You're 'the' God, that's a fact.
Author notes
Oh God ! When we have strongly locked ourselves, then, How can we lose one another?... Unknown.
This quote is a prompt.
In a list
A contest entry
- then... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended January 24, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feel Free...
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Another lovely poem, where can we go where God is not?
David
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Thank you, smile, I don't want to go anywhere where he doesn't want me going...smile...that's more like what I mean-thanks again
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I'm sure that he will make sure that does not happen,
after all, IMO - He is us and we are him
Regards david
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Great wisdom "I do not wish to enter where you are not." That alone would save us endless trouble! Beautiful "do not let me drift, untethered, far away." Lovely "You are my forever God, my forever home." Excellent rhyme. Excellent description of steadfast and immovable faithfulness.
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You're so kind, Thanks buckets...lots of love
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You surely deserve this trophy ! congratulations !!
And warmest regards ! A wonderful read thank you.
Friend Easy
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Thanks Friend...smile
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this is really great no wonder you won silver
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well written you did a lovely job with this piece
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very nice write! Also, couldn't agree with you more, I love God and think more people should have faith now a days. Good rhyme and flow.
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When thoughts of lesser gods seek me out.
When I'm assailed by persistant, costly doubt...
I'll still remain true, faithful, solely in tact,
where can I go? You're 'the' God, that's a fact.
tell it! There is but only one God. You've penned a brillint piece. Loved the rhyme...unforced. Great work here!
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very excellent write
a stunning job
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Well done spiritual poem. Congrats on your silver shiney! You did well with the promp! Pam
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Great write! I love it. I have read a few Spiritual poems and this is definitely of the list of my favorites. I love the entire poem but this, I would have to say, is my favorite part.
"Inside clouds of joy or morbid, solid sorrow
it's You today, yesterday and again tomorrow.
I cannot ascertain another road to roam,
You are my forever God, my forever home."
Keep writing.
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this is amongst the best poems i have ever read about God...jus love the last line "where can I go? You're 'the' God, that's a fact."
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Yes..that is fact.HE is the God..very much thoughtful picture of the life and HIS relation with it, is shown..thanks for your wonderful entry...
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Excellent
Wow I truly enjoyed this poem for the contest and in life for real!! I feel so much as you do. What a great take on the prompt. You should do well in the contest. Great rhyme, imagery and message too. Just a beautiful spiritual write. Thank you for sharing with me and best wishes in the contest.
Blessings,
Kelle Marie
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Thank you so kindly for your lovely review...lots of love
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hey there honey a great spiritual read, i liked the rhyming in this its a nice flowing piece as all your work is, i always leave your page feeling refreshed and i have not found any flaws in your work
it brightens up my day
well done xxxx
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Wow, you have just made my day with these lovely, thoughtful comments, thank you ever so much; I am graced by your words
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Excellebt paraphrase of he quote. You have showd words we all should sau to our Father in Heaven.
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Z, thanks friend...its all true, outside of Him, there is no melol
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Ooh..You have captured the verse that rings in my heart about being close to God.Wonderful flow and rhyme...and such deep inspirational thought here!Wishing you the best in the contest!
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Thank you so much, wow, I am so happy you got something out of it
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