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Electronic Love

It needs to be re-wired
too short, it won't connect
I can't get it in the hole
or keep the damn thing erect.

It slips out on me all the time
It's really quite a shame
The top is really floppy
I grow tired of this game.

It's reached the end
of it's useful life
I really want to stab it
with a sharp steak knife.

Too expensive to replace
right now I don't have the green
So I will just sit and stare at it
and try to keep it clean.

The last thing I want
is it covered in dust
cobwebs or dirt
or even rust.

Afraid to use it right now
for fear of being shocked
maybe I should just keep it
somewhere tightly locked.

I'm really going to miss it
if I can't get it to work
I use it for hours everyday
but now it's got this quirk.

I'll try to keep it working
at least until next week
when I can buy a new one
and replace this old antique.

So wish me the best of luck
that it won't surely kill me
and know that soon enough
it will be an old retiree.



Author notes

You thought I was talking about something else didn't you! I was talking about my laptop! Now get your mind out of the gutter and go write some poetry

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  • Sector-Hunter
    November 6, 2009
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    Hahahahahaha LMAO you are something wow this was so funny. Hope that laptop is working right now lol SH


  • Bruce silver member
    September 6, 2009
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    Brilliant! Of course it's your laptop! What else could it be? Wonderful write - I love these teases!


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    March 8, 2009
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    Very clever piece. I did think you were talking about something else. HaHAHAHAHA!


  • funny valentine
    February 1, 2009
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    BAHA! I love this!

    (: ♥


  • gllarso
    January 18, 2009

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    LMAO! Ingenious, you deffenately had me thinking naughty thoughts...as usual...
    Well done, very fun and entertaining.

    -Garrett


  • carl dunford
    January 11, 2009

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    LOL!!!!! if it wasn't for the title I would have thought of
    some thing else ! Some thing with batteries lol!!!!!!
    very well done babe, hope you get it fixed.


  • firion
    January 10, 2009

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    lol

    you kno i actually had a feeling it was bout your computer when it said electronics. nice piece even if you were tryen to fool everyone


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 10, 2009
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    WOW! L.O.L.

    YES, guilty as 'CHARGED!' you had me the whole way!!! love this!

  • mcfreeman
    January 10, 2009
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    LOL,,,had me believing

    it was a personal critique.......brilliant bit of writing here


    • sensualbutterfly
      January 10, 2009
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      Thanks James! I appreciate you comments as always! And glad to know it fulfilled it's purpose

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