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Communion

 

 

 

In tune with mother nature
she kneels down at the edge
the way to peaceful rapture
she vows to take the pledge

The light of love's reflection
she holds within her eyes
in tune with life’s perfection
while moon and sun arise

Communion with the living earth
will give her life a greater worth
and bring about the season's birth

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

60 Word Picture Prompt

**60 words exactly. I will be counting to make sure.**

Picture credit - Artwork by Julia Starr aka night-fate

60 words used.

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    January 17

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    A good write and interpretation of the picture prompt. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Word count: 60. Thank you for your entry.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 11
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    Aww Sue this is a very beautiful write!!!!! You truly did a lovely and incredible job!!!


  • ogene
    January 11
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    In one word...Beautiful!!!

  • Bad Bill
    January 11

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    Perfectly formed and very well written,
    your poem is great...and I am smitten!

    Good work,
    Bill


  • doolie gold member
    January 10

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    A beautiful poem that flows perfectly.

    I love the way you made the image a border.

    Best wishes in the contest.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    January 10

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    Really so beautiful, and fits this picture so wonderfully; this feels both mythical and mystical! Your rhymes are wonderful and the meter and flow are just perfect. So well done!


  • arafura gold member
    January 10
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    Excellent. Beautifully written.

  • ecrivain01
    January 10

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    Very nice.

    In line 5, you forgot the apostrophe in "love's". All in all, good job.

    I hope your holidays were spectacular.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 10

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    I love the form and meter here, two quatrains of termeter the odd numbered lines ending in an amphibrach and a feminine rhyme, the rest purely iambic.
    To close in a triplet rather than a couplet and to couch the three lines in iambic tetrameter lifts the poem further.
    This is wonderful poetry, never mind the word restriction!

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