I hid from you
in the attic
of my craven mind
dreaming of ways
to stay your breath
while retaining innocence
i ran away
to the basement
to let the creepy crawlies
have their way
the slithering outside
only matches the inside
breathe deeply
i stood up
under the sun
and blinked my eyes
and stretched my limbs
headed down the road
trying to find a harbor
i will sail away
and find a place
that lacks you
and your false anger
that you blame on me
even though i have been dead since birth
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The emotion of pain stands out so clearly and you can feel it as the poem comes to the end. Trying to find a safe place to be free of the pain is always the hardest thing to do. The Harbor a perfect place in most people's eyes it sheilds you from all of the pain you must feel.
Great Write!!!
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wow... just, wow. this whole poem is just one constant moment of pain. You can feel it in every word and in every verse. And, to me, it seems that you didn't let the bullshit keep you down and out came a beautifully written poem. excellent work.
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THis is so sad & scary too. I felt all the emotion. I understood too.
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Wow, love this....so much emotion and depth in your words. I can relate to every inch of this poem. Great write. My favourile like of all has to be the very final line. that is really heart breaking, thought provoking and a real great way to end this poem. I think it affected me so much because i am the same. I have been abused since i can remember so i feel exactly that way 'dead since birth'. you have so much talent. Thank you for entering my contest means a lot to me
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