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It's "all" in one poem

I was standing very small
and left and right a tow'ring wall.
For eons now they do enthrall
spectators, at least make them fall
and on their knees respect they all
the marvellous works of nature, tall
they loom when monstrous thunders roll
or peacefully in sunny fall.

Author notes

It's a bit short I admit. I'll continue work on this poem when I do have more time and more words in my head. Excellent picture btw!

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  • Mirthryl
    March 6

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    Enjoyable monorhyme. I particularly enjoyed word choices of "enthrall" and "loom" for such a work of nature! I like the transition from "very small" (certainly, the first impression on the mind in such a setting!) to "loom" and "monstrous."
    Next to last line, I might possibly consider rhyming the internal "loom" with "boom" at the end of the line, or search up a strict rhyme, possibly 'thunders call' or 'they loom 'neath cloudy, thund'rous pall"?


  • smonte19124 gold member
    January 18

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    Excellent take on the prompt short is not always bad you've relayed a message and it is received. Thank you for entering and good luck. God Bless, Jo-Ann


  • Timespell
    January 10
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    Ha' its so unfinnished ha'


  • Denerica silver member
    January 10

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    Short but inspiring and the truth of how we would think and feel being small compared to all that rock. Blessings.