Day I - Saturday
this room needs wallpaper.
the landlord told me that two people
used to live here
and that the pretty one died of cancer.
I have some decent theories
about the cracks in the walls
being the outlines of their faces.
Day II - Sunday
decidedly,
the wallpaper should be graph paper. that way, when the black spots appear
they will correspond exactly to dates and locations and I won't have to
look too hard or do much figuring.
Day III - Monday
while rearranging the apartment, I contemplate having the bed
face the black hole.
maybe even moving the bed in
to the black hole, maybe
just forgetting the bed and walking into the hole
right now.
Day IV - Tuesday
I wake up to find all my knives misplaced; on the floor, behind doors, even little tips poking out from the bathtub drain.
Day V - Wednesday
many things are black; the goldfish, the bedsheets, the faces of the people
that I meet. the cracks are seeping black ink, it runs down the wall. nothing that I do to lift the stains or halt the leak has been effective in the least. it's getting so bad that I can no longer locate the black hole by sight alone.
Day VI - Thursday
when I stand in certain places, which I believe to be near to the hole but of course could not be sure, the hands of the clocks spin wildly and one of the hands of the grandfather clock has even fallen off. I have relocated all time-telling devices to underneath my bed, where they do not beat.
Day VII - Friday
I sleep a long sleep.
Author notes
looking for it everywhere
In a list
A contest entry
- Daily Log! by Technicolor.
400 points, ended January 26, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this was an extremely enjoyable read.
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i don't know how i stumbled across this, but i'm amazed. it's been a long time since i've been completely engrossed in a poem, actually reading -- not just skimming. great write.
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thank you, I love hearing that
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Just wow.
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sorry, forgot the applause!
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you do have something unique, and a certain style that i really like,
the lines about graph paper and wallpaper was fantastic! -
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thank you
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i'm addicted to your poetry.
if i went on about how much i like this, i could probably take a day. this was poignant, original and just- different..i mean, not cliche or anything and definitely not the overly done. simple, and straightforward.
brilliant.
PS: congrats on the gold
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Thanks, I'm glad you like my poetry.
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can't help it.
keep writing!
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ah yes, life on the edge of the event horizon.
this captures the feel of depression perfectly. awesome metaphor.
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Day VI made me smile. Bahaha
The black hole sounds really trippy.
"I have some decent theories
about the cracks in the walls
being the outlines of their faces."
Wait, I shouldn't smile..
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thanks
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i dig your warpings
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thank you
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"has been affective in the least" - unless this is a pun, you probably mean effective.
I find it very interesting how all the imagery you use here sounds so concrete and day-to-day, but really it's one huge metaphor.
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i'm glad you like it, and thanks for telling me about effective. i'm not so good with grammar lol.
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perfect, I'd say.
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godDAMN this is great.
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III and IV are my favorite. this is amazing
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thanks lisa
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this had a tad of humor in it i like that! im not sure you were meaning to but i guess thats just what i saw. there were some interesting links to almost scientific images and its something i have never read before which is awesome so thank you for sharing
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i'm glad you like it
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This is the best thing I've read today.
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This is incredible....wow. Just..wow.
I love how it tells a complete story with just a few lines and stanzas. Like a horror movie or a scary story. This was great.
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thanks
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