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early affinities

I

of those memories of which i am intimate
four siblings sharing a plate of fries seems to stick

necessity brought us together in that poverty
in which none of us felt inadequacy

 

II

 

i remember fondly those fried green tomatoes

over-peppered by aunt pat's enthusiasm

 

always the first stop relative to our blood in georgia

 

i was certain there were scant pigs to produce fatback in florida

 

III 

 

there always seemed a rareness of red clay in duval

except when certain sentimentalities would bleed over 

 

 

 


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sentimental

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 12

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    This is wonderful bro! Made me all sentimental and thinking of my own memories.


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 11

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    Bittersweet, there is a sadness to this sentimental piece, but with a strand of hope to spare. Nicely done!


  • hawkeslake gold member
    January 10

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    Well-done again -- I could almost taste those fried-green tomatoes -- they really don't do them well except in the South. Your descriptions are so rich and vivid.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    January 10

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    This has such a wealth of imagery in it - the food links between the first and second segments are interesting - and I love the blood/clay textures of the poem thank you for entering!



    Polly

  • epleen
    January 10

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    the incorporation of food with feelings here is so smooth and warm at the same time! I could feel the family and realness. Quite the nice job and good luck in the contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    January 10

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    aw a wonderful take on the promt good luck in the contestmaralisa

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