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Hurt Me No More

Waking up so dazed and confused
Not Sure if its from the pills or him
Looking around to find some clothes
I stand up but drop right back to the ground

I here his footsteps down the hall
So I curl back up in to a ball
Afraid of what is going to happen next
I take a handful and hope i don't wake

Next thing i know is he is waking me back up
Telling me how sorry he is
how much he didn't mean to hurt me
All things i have heard a thousand times before

Lays Me back down in my bed
I wish he wouldn't
Now i am just stuck with the thoughts in my head
Passing out with these unbearable thoughts

Waking the next morning
To find him down stairs
Sick to my stomach
Better run quick

My head lay on the toilet
As I get sick
To think I call him Dad

I Go to school that day
With all my friends
While all My friends talk about there guy friends
I think of my dad

That night I'm awakened
Yet again by this creep
As he tells me its okay
and that its supposed to happen this way

Passing out to make it go away
waking up to know it still will happen day after day
So I Will continue to take my pills
And hope that some day this all goes away

Until that day
I will be under the blanket
Or on the floor
Wishing That Daddy will hurt me no more.

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  • TheomachistThanatos
    February 23

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    ...

    i have only one criticizm, the title and theme is sorta cliche...
    other then that, woah... you struck a chord with me... those type of people deserve nothing less than a throat torn out...


  • invisible2u
    January 31
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    really intense and emtional good write! thanks for entering my contest!!!


  • serenity silvermoon
    January 16

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    i hope that this didnt happen to you if it did i am sorry i was hurt this way by my step uncle it i have to live with it my whole life becausethe day it happend and the time it happend was when i got ran over by my 4 wheeler and now my legs hurt everyday and the pain just brings back that day and makes me want to kill him for hurting me thanks for sharing this poem and your heart i hope that you are good and this is not happening anymore if it happend if you need a friend to talk to i'll be here s


  • MacDad
    January 16

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    That was successfully shocking indeed. Well written though some meter problems and minor grammar.

    Well done, keep up the good work!


  • Susan John Francis
    January 15

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    We have to do something about it....Can feel the insanity here.... but everything ends..... you really did shock me.Best of luck with the contest.

    Susan


  • fatality-rhymed77
    January 11

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    This is a really heavy subject but you did well. There were a few grammatical errors but not many. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest. I hope things get better for you soon.


  • x Bright Eyes x
    January 10

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    wow this was really hard for me to read as it was close to my heart sorry you went through this hun

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