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one night after another





there is a man
and a pretty woman
he doesn't love.
she wants sex.
he shrugs. says, sure.

he doesn't need
the bitch anymore
anyways, he thinks.

and pigs can fly.

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  • usefuldistraction
    January 14
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    It must be football season!

  • piggyback
    January 10

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    I enjoy the twist at the end... the irony, how you use parallelism to show the true point of your poem. Also, like the casual, simplistic tone here.